Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Response:
In some individuals point of view, the best method in order to gathering people with variety of cultural background and generations is music, Despite the fact that I agree up to a point with the main idea with the aim of different cultures, I partly disagree about effect of music to bring defferent generations together.
There are several reasons why would I argue in favour of music is usefull in terms of gathering people of several nations. First of all, it is needless to say that music includes almost all human feelings and every human in the world with any language or culture can understand the feeling message in any music. For instance, in my country most of the time when somebodey is in a sad mood he listens a music in Alternative genre and he does not give the laguage into account. Secondly, humans are instinctively paying attention to the music and it is not dipended to the bachground of the music's culture. For a shining example, nowaday, there are several musictions around the world play music in the street and residents alway wait for listenig their music, no matter if they are in rush or not.
On the other hand, the main reason why I tend to refuse the effect of music on binrging individuals with different ages is differences between generations are one of the key factors of music taste and as they say : the higher age goes to, the lower understanding comes to you. For example, it is remarkable that the taste of a person from the silent generation is different with a Gen Z person and music can not communicate them toghether.
In conclusion,even though music is the best solution for comunitation between humans with different cultures, it is not a good way in terms of ages as a result.
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In some individuals point of view, the best method in order to gathering people with variety of cultural background and generations is music, Despite the fact that I agree up to a point with the main idea with the aim of different cultures, I partly disagree about effect of music to bring defferent generations together.
There are several reasons why would I argue in favour of music is usefull in terms of gathering people of several nations. First of all, it is needless to say that music includes almost all human feelings and every human in the world with any language or culture can understand the feeling message in any music. For instance, in my country most of the time when somebodey is in a sad mood he listens a music in Alternative genre and he does not give the laguage into account. Secondly, humans are instinctively paying attention to the music and it is not dipended to the bachground of the music's culture. For a shining example, nowaday, there are several musictions around the world play music in the street and residents alway wait for listenig their music, no matter if they are in rush or not.
On the other hand, the main reason why I tend to refuse the effect of music on binrging individuals with different ages is differences between generations are one of the key factors of music taste and as they say : the higher age goes to, the lower understanding comes to you. For example, it is remarkable that the taste of a person from the silent generation is different with a Gen Z person and music can not communicate them toghether.
In conclusion,even though music is the best solution for comunitation between humans with different cultures, it is not a good way in terms of ages as a result.