Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Response:
While some people advocate for using music as an international language for communication between diversities, other assert that although music can imply certain feelings, it is still an abstract contest, so it can lead to misunderstangs and disagreements. Meanwhile, I believe by rising the number of emmigrants in different countries, music could be one of the possible options for people to communicate and socilize.
On one hand, every culture enjoys its own traditional music style, therefore, as a certain song or lyric is precious and invalueable to its purposed group, it might not spur that much emotions in folks other cultures. Although there are various songs that are pleasant to every age group or ethnic. In the past, people only knew the local or national musics of their region; however, this issue was resolved by the advent of internt and social media, which play crusial roles in advertising and popularizing the songs of other nationalities. For instance, nowadays, no matter where you live, you have onlin, virtual access to your favorit singers' concerts, street plays, or other festivals; and the most encouraging component here for individuals is that there are a multitude of people with different ages and nationalities that are enjoying musics or even lyrics of a particular language that they all know well.
On the other hand, this trend is not always appealing in different situations. As you can see, Jaz music, which is highly popular in America, is not even known in many countries and playing this type of music not only does not spur any excitement in peopl but also bores or frustrates them. Another example would be spanish music, in some depressed and calm countries where people are not partial to dancing and cheerful songs, this type of music with rapid and exciting rythems that make you more active while dancing, might not be well-accepted. Moreover, every ethinc has its own taditional songs besides its special dancing that only their people know and perform. Inadditon, when you try to include foreigners in this phenomenon it migh end in misunderstandings due to not believing or respecting your culture enough.
In conclusion, I firmly believe, as music is the dynamic spirit of every society, it can also be a bridge between all diversities to entract with eachother and acknowledge new information about other cultures and generations in order to have a more integrated and tranquil society.
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While some people advocate for using music as an international language for communication between diversities, other assert that although music can imply certain feelings, it is still an abstract contest, so it can lead to misunderstangs and disagreements. Meanwhile, I believe by rising the number of emmigrants in different countries, music could be one of the possible options for people to communicate and socilize.
On one hand, every culture enjoys its own traditional music style, therefore, as a certain song or lyric is precious and invalueable to its purposed group, it might not spur that much emotions in folks other cultures. Although there are various songs that are pleasant to every age group or ethnic. In the past, people only knew the local or national musics of their region; however, this issue was resolved by the advent of internt and social media, which play crusial roles in advertising and popularizing the songs of other nationalities. For instance, nowadays, no matter where you live, you have onlin, virtual access to your favorit singers' concerts, street plays, or other festivals; and the most encouraging component here for individuals is that there are a multitude of people with different ages and nationalities that are enjoying musics or even lyrics of a particular language that they all know well.
On the other hand, this trend is not always appealing in different situations. As you can see, Jaz music, which is highly popular in America, is not even known in many countries and playing this type of music not only does not spur any excitement in peopl but also bores or frustrates them. Another example would be spanish music, in some depressed and calm countries where people are not partial to dancing and cheerful songs, this type of music with rapid and exciting rythems that make you more active while dancing, might not be well-accepted. Moreover, every ethinc has its own taditional songs besides its special dancing that only their people know and perform. Inadditon, when you try to include foreigners in this phenomenon it migh end in misunderstandings due to not believing or respecting your culture enough.
In conclusion, I firmly believe, as music is the dynamic spirit of every society, it can also be a bridge between all diversities to entract with eachother and acknowledge new information about other cultures and generations in order to have a more integrated and tranquil society.