Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Response:
Among the people, there are many persons who believe music is a midpoint which can conect all the generations and cultures. I don`t think similarly, i think it depends on the song so we are not able to say that point of viwe is always true or always wrong.
Inittially, we born in different cultures who have different tast so we rais with completly vary artistic mind.as time past we used to that kind of music for example African and American people are not lestening to same sort of music they will listen kind of music which their brain use to hear, and as i believe human spesious are tend to prove that what they believe in and what they prefer is the best thing in the world. I think like this becuase in my own familiy dispite the fact that we all rais in same culture we have totally differ tast in music some times my mom even says me what i`m listening to is hearting her ears it`s unbelieveble for me!!!
While, in Iranian culture there is a singger who whithout any duabt all iranians believe in her voice and we are certainly sure about the matter of fact she was astonishing and her voice was unice. so in this sort of situation that point of viwe which says all generation can conect each other with music is true. also in an universal example i can name Bakh or Bethoven and many many other pianists orchesters and so on who connects the people among the world so it can bring joy and peace for vary cultures.
in conclution, i am partly agree but not completely becuase in some situation music is a universal language wich every body underestant and in some, it is difficult to underestant a music which is for a different culture or even generation.
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Among the people, there are many persons who believe music is a midpoint which can conect all the generations and cultures. I don`t think similarly, i think it depends on the song so we are not able to say that point of viwe is always true or always wrong.
Inittially, we born in different cultures who have different tast so we rais with completly vary artistic mind.as time past we used to that kind of music for example African and American people are not lestening to same sort of music they will listen kind of music which their brain use to hear, and as i believe human spesious are tend to prove that what they believe in and what they prefer is the best thing in the world. I think like this becuase in my own familiy dispite the fact that we all rais in same culture we have totally differ tast in music some times my mom even says me what i`m listening to is hearting her ears it`s unbelieveble for me!!!
While, in Iranian culture there is a singger who whithout any duabt all iranians believe in her voice and we are certainly sure about the matter of fact she was astonishing and her voice was unice. so in this sort of situation that point of viwe which says all generation can conect each other with music is true. also in an universal example i can name Bakh or Bethoven and many many other pianists orchesters and so on who connects the people among the world so it can bring joy and peace for vary cultures.
in conclution, i am partly agree but not completely becuase in some situation music is a universal language wich every body underestant and in some, it is difficult to underestant a music which is for a different culture or even generation.