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Question:
In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Response:
Nowadays, access to international foods and fruits from supermarkets and shopping malls has become more prevalence. I believe it can bring several benefits to locals and tourists. One of the advantages of this global food access is that locals can consume their desirable agricultural products that originally have not been cultivated in their country. For instance, when I worked out in a gym and went for a diet, Avacado was one of my main fruits in my diet regimen. Not only does this fruit have less Callories among others but it also boosts stamina and prevents muscle weakness during endurance exercices. Unfortunately, Avocado is not a local fruit in Iran. However, I could easily purchase it from a nearby supermarket, as it is imported from countries with tropical climates. Therefore, locals can enjoy accessing to international foods and fruits that are not usually cooked or grow in their country. Moreover, the more international foods are available in a country, the more convenient would be for tourists. Establishing numerous international restauants in tourist hotspots ensure that people with different tastes can be attracted to the area, increasing tourist influx and bring economic and financial benefits to the host's government. Furthermore, this can improve cultural exchange and connects people globally, familiarizing them with different nations' cuisines and traditional dishes. For instance, a new turkish restaurant has been developed in our city, teaming with customers who saught after turkish dishes, such as Burok. Even, some people have been encouraged to find the receipes and learn how to cook them. Thus, as international foods get more available in a country, not only can captivate tourists to the area but also different foods of countries can assimilate into the local cultures, making people socially and emotionally closer. In conclusion, I believe it is beneficial to have access to international food products from supermarkets and restaurants, as it can have essential advantages for both locals and tourists. Locals can taste the agricultural products that is not harvested in their own country and enjoy their tastes and reap their health benefits. Furthermore, it can lead in more tourist influx and people can gain knowledge about other cultures and traditional dishes.
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Nowadays, access to international foods and fruits from supermarkets and shopping malls has become more prevalence. I believe it can bring several benefits to locals and tourists. One of the advantages of this global food access is that locals can consume their desirable agricultural products that originally have not been cultivated in their country. For instance, when I worked out in a gym and went for a diet, Avacado was one of my main fruits in my diet regimen. Not only does this fruit have less Callories among others but it also boosts stamina and prevents muscle weakness during endurance exercices. Unfortunately, Avocado is not a local fruit in Iran. However, I could easily purchase it from a nearby supermarket, as it is imported from countries with tropical climates. Therefore, locals can enjoy accessing to international foods and fruits that are not usually cooked or grow in their country. Moreover, the more international foods are available in a country, the more convenient would be for tourists. Establishing numerous international restauants in tourist hotspots ensure that people with different tastes can be attracted to the area, increasing tourist influx and bring economic and financial benefits to the host's government. Furthermore, this can improve cultural exchange and connects people globally, familiarizing them with different nations' cuisines and traditional dishes. For instance, a new turkish restaurant has been developed in our city, teaming with customers who saught after turkish dishes, such as Burok. Even, some people have been encouraged to find the receipes and learn how to cook them. Thus, as international foods get more available in a country, not only can captivate tourists to the area but also different foods of countries can assimilate into the local cultures, making people socially and emotionally closer. In conclusion, I believe it is beneficial to have access to international food products from supermarkets and restaurants, as it can have essential advantages for both locals and tourists. Locals can taste the agricultural products that is not harvested in their own country and enjoy their tastes and reap their health benefits. Furthermore, it can lead in more tourist influx and people can gain knowledge about other cultures and traditional dishes.
Here is a corrected and optimized version of your essay: --- Nowadays, access to international foods and fruits from supermarkets and shopping malls has become more prevalent. I believe this trend brings several benefits to both locals and tourists. One of the advantages of global food access is that locals can enjoy agricultural products that are not typically cultivated in their country. For instance, when I was working out at the gym and following a diet, avocado was one of the main fruits in my regimen. Not only does this fruit have fewer calories compared to others, but it also boosts stamina and prevents muscle weakness during endurance exercises. Unfortunately, avocado is not a local fruit in Iran. However, I could easily purchase it from a nearby supermarket, as it is imported from countries with tropical climates. Therefore, locals can benefit from access to international foods and fruits that are not usually grown or cooked in their country. Moreover, the greater the availability of international foods in a country, the more convenient it becomes for tourists. Establishing numerous international restaurants in tourist hotspots ensures that people with diverse tastes are attracted to the area, increasing tourist influx and bringing economic benefits to the host government. Furthermore, this can enhance cultural exchange and connect people globally, familiarizing them with various nations' cuisines and traditional dishes. For instance, a new Turkish restaurant has opened in our city, attracting customers who seek authentic Turkish dishes, such as börek. Some patrons have even been inspired to find recipes and learn how to cook these dishes themselves. Thus, as international foods become more available in a country, they not only captivate tourists but also allow different cuisines to assimilate into local cultures, fostering social and emotional connections among people. In conclusion, I believe that having access to international food products from supermarkets and restaurants is beneficial, as it offers significant advantages for both locals and tourists. Locals can savor agricultural products that are not harvested in their own country, enjoying their flavors and health benefits. Furthermore, this access can lead to an increase in tourist influx, allowing people to gain knowledge about other cultures and traditional dishes. --- This revised version corrects grammatical errors, improves clarity, and enhances the overall flow of the essay, making it more suitable for a high-scoring proficiency test response.
Band Score: 6.5

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Task Achievement

  • Strengths: The essay addresses the prompt effectively by discussing both the benefits for locals and tourists. It provides relevant examples, such as the availability of avocados in Iran and the presence of a Turkish restaurant, to support the points made.
  • Areas for Improvement: While the essay clearly states the positive aspects of global food availability, it could be strengthened by acknowledging potential drawbacks or counterarguments to provide a more balanced view.

Coherence and Cohesion

  • Strengths: The essay is well-organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each paragraph focuses on a specific point, contributing to the overall coherence.
  • Areas for Improvement: Transition words and phrases could be used more effectively to enhance the flow between ideas. For example, using phrases like "on the other hand" or "in contrast" when discussing potential negatives could improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource

  • Strengths: The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, such as "prevalence," "endurance exercises," and "cultural exchange."
  • Areas for Improvement: There are a few spelling errors, such as "Avacado" (should be "Avocado"), "Callories" (should be "calories"), and "receipes" (should be "recipes"). Additionally, some phrases could be more precise, such as "locals can enjoy accessing to international foods" which could be rephrased to "locals can enjoy access to international foods."

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

  • Strengths: The essay uses a variety of sentence structures, including complex sentences, which demonstrates a good grammatical range.
  • Areas for Improvement: There are some grammatical errors, such as "access to international foods and fruits has become more prevalence" (should be "more prevalent") and "locals can consume their desirable agricultural products" (should be "desired agricultural products"). Attention to subject-verb agreement and article usage would improve accuracy.

Overall Impression

The essay effectively argues that the availability of international foods in supermarkets is a positive development, providing clear examples and reasoning. To enhance the essay, consider addressing potential negatives, improving transitions, and correcting minor lexical and grammatical errors. This will provide a more comprehensive and polished response.

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